Mixing it up

In response to Jules’ prompt on Carpe Diem #440, Ghost-Writer Jules, to mix up some short form poems into something longer, I am trying two elfjes sandwiching 5-7-5 haiku. I generally hate writing tight forms, but I rather enjoyed doing these. Do they work? I don’t know. I don’t know much about elfjes and am roughly following the guidelines here on a dedicated elfje site. What do you think?

breaking drought

first drops
falling on iron
the cycle of seasons

above stunted wheat
the sky filling with rain clouds
farmers’ hopeful eyes

rain flows
into our tanks
the blissful sound of


shade tree

horse manure
full of seeds
five large bags of

the sweet-scented soil
I dig the garden over
while the blackbirds watch

red oak
ready to plant
and hopefully very soon


old ted

old teddy
on the rocker
remembering the play of

a baby magpie
squawks all day as if starving
Mum’s full-throated song

her eyes
the young mother
hits the sheets and

10 thoughts on “Mixing it up

  1. Great choice of combined forms – they share the same essence and spirit. These all very much evoke sense and emotion. I like the way the “bomb” of the two eljie are cpmmected with the haiku as a lovely japanese bridge between

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